Lily DePaolo
Posts : 32
Join date : 2016-06-05
Wrestler Name(s) : Lily "The Bitch" Tulip
 | Subject: Family Comes First Review  Tue Jun 14, 2016 10:11 am | |
| http://forum.brutalforcewrestling.com/t876-family-comes-firstIf anyone has the time to read my rp. Its the first in a while I have done with this character. Also I usually don't do pieces of rps for the show, but I wanted to write one like this to be scored on first. Depending on your thoughts, I may go back to not "live" rps but I would love to hear what your thoughts are on this matter. | |
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Akragth
The Founding Father
Posts : 1174
Join date : 2015-11-20
Wrestler Name(s) : Akragth
| | Subject: Re: Family Comes First Review Wed Jun 15, 2016 11:59 am | |
| I like it. A post match piece isn't the norm because it's hard to know if to be happy or sad without knowing the result - but you've made it work. I thought that it sells Lily well, whilst also breaking down her opponents nicely. She was heelish, so didn't sell them as opponents, but that's okay in that scenario. Only issue I saw was the commentator's colours. But that's very easily fixed. You can find the correct ones here in this post. Overall, good work. I look forward to whatever is next 
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AdamWolfe
Resident Puppet Master
Posts : 465
Join date : 2015-12-06
Age : 30
| | Subject: Re: Family Comes First Review Wed Jun 15, 2016 12:17 pm | |
| I liked the colours. Or maybe I like seeing Ak suffer. Who knows.
Great rp though! | |
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Lily DePaolo
Posts : 32
Join date : 2016-06-05
Wrestler Name(s) : Lily "The Bitch" Tulip
| | Subject: Re: Family Comes First Review Wed Jun 15, 2016 9:19 pm | |
| Thanks guys appreciate it. I will edit the commentators colors right now for you. | |
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